Hi there, the original owner of this account (my best friend), has moved to BluepawPuuraBloodfur.  I am taking over this account (or I have been for a long time, since he never used it all that much).  So belated MUWAHAHAHA?

*Coughs before continuing*

I am not a writer, but my friend is (or tries to be).  I am merely just the person he turns to when he wants (or as is almost always the case, needs) feedback on his written works.  He has come a long way from the story "Conception of the Last Aspect" or as he decided to change it long ago, "Conception of the Last Keeper", and while reviewing his works is easy because he doesn't write them up very often, I find myself wanting to do more than just do his.  So I am going to start providing feedback when I can on stories I read here.

One last thing.  The way I give feedback is not meant to belittle the work I am critiquing, though it may sound blunt.  Poor mister Bluepaw is unable to accept anything less than all out warfare on anything he brings to me, though, again, I do not belittle or "flame" his works.  I give feedback as well as I can, but for the most part, the beginning of the feedback is all about grammatical stuff.  The second part is about the shortcomings in descriptions (if any) or characters, or scenes which may people ask "Who the fuck did I just switch viewpoints to?".  The third and last part is to shower you all with praise about what did work.  This last part is usually very short if I only give grammatical feedback, because that means that I loved everything about the story itself.  I also do try to rate fairly for those I give feedback to.  I rarely give a 5, sometimes a 4, and usually a 3.  A 5 means there are only a few typos, grammatically, and only found on the first read through.  The story has to be well driven, with good characters, and fantastic descriptions of stuff in the scenes (such as background stuff and perception of details).  4 has some grammatical errors on the first read through, but nothing that severely detracts from the overall enjoyment I get from reading the story.  The story, while not having to have the best descriptions of things, has to have good characters, a driven story (not just a porno story, though they are nice too), and has to have decent depictions of the perceptions the author is trying to make the reader imagine.  A three is given to a story that is decent all around, but has some grammar issues and descriptive issues.

Example of decent description:

The snow was cold and soft, and blanketed everything in a stillness that was peaceful.

Great description:

The snow was cold enough to make his ungloved paw hurt.  It was also soft when it wasn't compacted into a hard sheet, almost like a soft carpet.  With the area blanketed in the white stuff, everything seemed sleepy, and still, as if doing anything excitedly would break the tranquility that everything enjoyed at the moment.