The obligatory critique post!
Here's the place to tell me if I'm failing, "doing it wrong", or even passing with a decent grade. I'd love to see how I'm doing! I don't want to ruin one of my favourite characters, so I'd really like some advice!
I'd love it if you could suggest some things I could do to improve. Thank you! I'm trying hard, so I'll continue to do my very best!
Feel free to post normally or anonymously. Be as harsh as you'd like; anything's welcome! Praises, flames.... anything goes!
Here's the place to tell me if I'm failing, "doing it wrong", or even passing with a decent grade. I'd love to see how I'm doing! I don't want to ruin one of my favourite characters, so I'd really like some advice!
I'd love it if you could suggest some things I could do to improve. Thank you! I'm trying hard, so I'll continue to do my very best!
Feel free to post normally or anonymously. Be as harsh as you'd like; anything's welcome! Praises, flames.... anything goes!
Coooooold.... it's too cold!
I can't even play Giita, and I can't find his little hat! I like the winter and snow a lot but it's not fun when I can't have hotpot and curl up and be warm! Uuuuu.... and I just got a kotatsu too. I wore my scarf and mittens to sleep last night and even my sheets and blankets weren't enough! This is really mean.... what if it's too cold for Santa to want to visit?! Or maybe he can fix everything back to normal for us! Is it okay to wish for that for Christmas? Tea would be really nice right now....
Oh, but maybe we can have a Christmas party once the heat is fixed! We can eat cake and play games and exchange presents and, um.... have a big party! I can even do the decorations! I helped to decorate the tree really pretty and--
[And she sneezes. Her teeth have been chattering throughout the entire call anyway.... those who know Yui are well aware that she has no tolerance for the weather.
And as such, housemates will find her sluggishly wandering through the living room and kitchen, draped in her kotatsu blanket and clad in her usual scarf and mittens. And.... well, complaining about how cold it is. Every so often she'll take her gloves off and press her hands to the cheeks of whomever she can find first.]
Warm....
I can't even play Giita, and I can't find his little hat! I like the winter and snow a lot but it's not fun when I can't have hotpot and curl up and be warm! Uuuuu.... and I just got a kotatsu too. I wore my scarf and mittens to sleep last night and even my sheets and blankets weren't enough! This is really mean.... what if it's too cold for Santa to want to visit?! Or maybe he can fix everything back to normal for us! Is it okay to wish for that for Christmas? Tea would be really nice right now....
Oh, but maybe we can have a Christmas party once the heat is fixed! We can eat cake and play games and exchange presents and, um.... have a big party! I can even do the decorations! I helped to decorate the tree really pretty and--
[And she sneezes. Her teeth have been chattering throughout the entire call anyway.... those who know Yui are well aware that she has no tolerance for the weather.
And as such, housemates will find her sluggishly wandering through the living room and kitchen, draped in her kotatsu blanket and clad in her usual scarf and mittens. And.... well, complaining about how cold it is. Every so often she'll take her gloves off and press her hands to the cheeks of whomever she can find first.]
Warm....
Does this mean I can't eat any of the cake in the stores?
Um.... Are cakes even made with milk?
[Someone's gotten away with not drinking any milk so far this week! Lucky girl.]
Um.... Are cakes even made with milk?
[Someone's gotten away with not drinking any milk so far this week! Lucky girl.]
One time, I ate the last slice of cake without telling anyone.
Azu-nyan! We should have a Christmas party! And we should eat cake and give presents and.... have a white Christmas! Sawa-chan-sensei's probably going to be with her boyfriend so I don't think she'll come. [Open mouth, insert foot.] We decorated the Christmas tree really pretty this year! It's a lot more festive here than it is at home! And Santa's going to come this year too! I hope he can fit down the chimney. Maybe I could just leave the front door open!
Can we go Christmas caroling? I heard that people here sing and go around to other people's houses! I'll bring Giita and give him a warm hat for the cold! It's really, really cold.... We can play 'Light and Fluffy Time' to make everyone warm again!
Oh, and come over and look what I'm making! It's a gingerbread house! I've never made one of these before but it looks really tasty! Do I really have to wait until Christmas to eat it? I already had the candy from the calender thing today.... can I have tomorrow's candy a little bit early?
[Any housemates or visitors will be able to see Yui making the most lovely gingerbread house ever. This is, of course, accompanied by a giant mess of icing, candy, and sugar strewn all over the table. And guess what? She's eating the icing (and some gumdrops) as she makes it. One for the house, one for her mouth.... Classy.]
Can we go Christmas caroling? I heard that people here sing and go around to other people's houses! I'll bring Giita and give him a warm hat for the cold! It's really, really cold.... We can play 'Light and Fluffy Time' to make everyone warm again!
Oh, and come over and look what I'm making! It's a gingerbread house! I've never made one of these before but it looks really tasty! Do I really have to wait until Christmas to eat it? I already had the candy from the calender thing today.... can I have tomorrow's candy a little bit early?
[Any housemates or visitors will be able to see Yui making the most lovely gingerbread house ever. This is, of course, accompanied by a giant mess of icing, candy, and sugar strewn all over the table. And guess what? She's eating the icing (and some gumdrops) as she makes it. One for the house, one for her mouth.... Classy.]
[So Yui finds herself in this random car. And there's a movie playing. Okay, it's clearly time to check the most important things!
Giita is in the back seat! This is cooler than Sawa-chan's car! And best of all.... THERE ARE FRICKING MILKSHAKES AND FRIES TOO BUT MOSTLY MILKSHAKES.
Forget wondering where she is or how this happened. These milkshakes are delicious and loaded with calories and real cream as they should be. Aren't you lucky to be locked in this car with such a bright girl, Norway? She hasn't even realized that it's locked.... or that Norway is in the car as well. Oops.]
Giita is in the back seat! This is cooler than Sawa-chan's car! And best of all.... THERE ARE FRICKING MILKSHAKES AND FRIES TOO BUT MOSTLY MILKSHAKES.
Forget wondering where she is or how this happened. These milkshakes are delicious and loaded with calories and real cream as they should be. Aren't you lucky to be locked in this car with such a bright girl, Norway? She hasn't even realized that it's locked.... or that Norway is in the car as well. Oops.]
So if I buy enough of this cereal could I get Mugi-chan to come here and make me sweets every day? Maybe she's a bonus prize.
[ooc: DERP, Mugi wasn't on her list, which basically includes lots of clothes, super bizarre plushies (lemons with faces!), and her cell phone.]
[ooc: DERP, Mugi wasn't on her list, which basically includes lots of clothes, super bizarre plushies (lemons with faces!), and her cell phone.]
[Hey there factory workers, are you having fun working? No? Good! Yui's come to sing patriotic songs to you! And yet.... she doesn't have her beloved Giita with her, so she's air guitaring and looking more than slightly worried.]
GO GO FACTORY WORKERS, YOU CAN DO YOUR BEST
WORK HARD AND PUT THE PEOPLE TO THE TEST~ ♫
GO GO WORK FOR THE FLAG WITH THE--
....Um, I forgot which colours are on the flag.
[Starting up again, here we go!]
GO GO FACTORY WORKERS, YOU SHOULD DO YOUR BEST
EVEN THOUGH THE SMOKESTACKS WILL MAKE THE TOWN A MESS~ ♫
BUT YOU HAVE TO START BY PUTTING THE METAL STUFF IN YOUR HAND
AND THEN YOU CAN GO AND MAKE A SUPER COOL ROCK BA--
GIITAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
GO GO FACTORY WORKERS, YOU CAN DO YOUR BEST
WORK HARD AND PUT THE PEOPLE TO THE TEST~ ♫
GO GO WORK FOR THE FLAG WITH THE--
....Um, I forgot which colours are on the flag.
[Starting up again, here we go!]
GO GO FACTORY WORKERS, YOU SHOULD DO YOUR BEST
EVEN THOUGH THE SMOKESTACKS WILL MAKE THE TOWN A MESS~ ♫
BUT YOU HAVE TO START BY PUTTING THE METAL STUFF IN YOUR HAND
AND THEN YOU CAN GO AND MAKE A SUPER COOL ROCK BA--
GIITAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
Everyone keeps saying that there are bad people out today, but I don't see anyone! If I have to stay away from boys, that means that I have to stay away from Giita too. He'd get so lonely all by himself up in my room.... so I'm not gonna listen!
Giita and I are going to go swimmi--
[She pauses and ponders this.]
We're going to go take a walk in the park together! Everyone's going to be so jealous because I cleaned him all special just for today!
[And to the park she goes. Backdated to Father's Day! No violence or anything over PG-13, but have fun!]
Giita and I are going to go swimmi--
[She pauses and ponders this.]
We're going to go take a walk in the park together! Everyone's going to be so jealous because I cleaned him all special just for today!
[And to the park she goes. Backdated to Father's Day! No violence or anything over PG-13, but have fun!]
[If you happen to be within a street or two of 773 Bunker, you're likely to hear the reverb of an amplified electric guitar echoing between the rooftops of houses. Yui is currently sitting on the front steps of her house, playing this first song and singing along in her wonderfully high-pitched voice. Feel free to admire her playing, slap her for finding her singing annoying, go starry eyed over her expensive Gibson Les Paul Standard guitar, scold her for playing too loudly, etc.
Either way, she does look pretty cool.... but anyone that knows her will affirm that it won't last for very long.]
Either way, she does look pretty cool.... but anyone that knows her will affirm that it won't last for very long.]
- Current Location:773 Bunker Street
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[Closing her eyes....]
Teach me, teach me!