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Nick Buchheit's avatar

For a minute I thought you might be pulling a Sixth Sense on us, but I liked the reveal of his alcoholism and temper being the end of him. The empty house is a haunting image to land on as someone with a family. Great work!

Sharron Bassano's avatar

You created tension from the first paragraph and held it strong all the way to the end. Hard to do, my friend. These lines hit me specially hard due to my own childhood history. "... Months and years of it. Rage and accusations. Suspicion and paranoia. Screams and fists. Until they had all finally had enough. Leaving him to rot." Even the house rejected him. Good riddance.

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