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Kudza Writes's avatar

Warm cosy vibes. This is a lovely read with all the autumn feels and you definitely capture the small town essence.

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I think this is wonderful. It captured my interest despite not being my normal reading material (I am running-through some classics a la Tortilla Flat and The House of Mirth presently) and I grin & chuckle considering what the next three chapters will bring. I agree with Michelle that you capture the essence of Autumn as a great atmosphere for . . . romantic intrigue.

I noted only two things, having read it just once. In terms of continuity, it's tough to have crunchy leaves on a rainy sidewalk (soggy leaves!) unless you set it up with a recent rain followed by dry days and more shedding leaves. You probably have to pick one: soggy or crunchy.

I didn't have my Sensory Mechanic Checklist alongside, but you might benefit from one more sound, somewhere, somehow. You've got color and aroma(s) in perfect proportions. Maybe you have the truck sputter and die?

(Secretly I'm hoping the mechanic is the good boy and our leading lady was the bad bad girl, by reputation only)

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