Keep it up the story is developing nicely

Good story, Hope to see more soon

Looking forward to seeing more of this story.

you might shrug at this series but even if you think it lacks luster and interest..i enjoyed the first three chapters..please dont let it fade out.

Great story! Please continue. Also when are Jason and Kelly becoming a couple? Just curius.

The quality of your writing remains consistently excellent.

The way you write makes it very easy to empathize with the characters. And yet again, an excellent job of pacing.

You continue doing an excellent job developing Jason's character. While we got to see a bit more development of Kelly's character, we still don't know all that much about her, as Jason's presence has dominated.

In the future, it would be a good idea to have some scenes not focused on your main character, so that other important characters can also become more fully developed and "real" to the reader.

A few glimpses into Kelly's life, even if it was just a scene where she was talking to herself, would have improved the balance.