Very sad. :*(

Is german your birth language? I took german for four years in high school and got to the point of accidently slipping into german from english. Everything seems correct to me.

meh i was forced to take french cuz of my father i hate french wish i could learn german so i'd know what everyones saying lol and thats bad cuz i'm actually part german -slaps myself- yeah i saved everyone the trouble

I wish i could speak english as good as german.... it´s more expressive, i think...
private teachers are welcome =)

your poem... why has it to make sense? it´s just a collection of your minds and that´s alright. When someone feels the same way, he´ll understand what you´re trying to say.

hey why does anything need to make sense to anyone but you, if someone else cant appreaciate something for what it is...they miss out.

Who should you live for...i believe thats something only your heart can tell you, not money, power, or anthing else.

if you only help yourself things will pass you by and you'll miss out unless you help people from time to time, or well thats what i believe anyway.

what the drawing is bad? Nay! It is awesome! Poem's good. I like ones that are emotional. :) 5/5.

I like it makes me feel like I am not the only one who thinks about that

the best poems always have emotion involved, be it the subject, inspiration, or both. my mom tried to get me to learn german at some point, but i never did get any good at it (i learned like three words). give me an hour or two and i could write a poem in nihongo (japanese) but it would be in badly drawn kana with a couple kanji, and the grammar would probably insult any nihonjin (japanese person) who so much as glanced at it ;( and how is that drawing bad? it fits the poem very well. oh, and the poem is nice. maybe not shakespeare quality, but what do i know? nothing that gives me the right to say that, at least

yeah, it has gramatical errors, but it's still a good poem, even if it's sad

totaly emotional is cut if yu ask me... if ther's someting exept yiff that i lik, it's a god poem. <3
lovly work Shaon! can't wait to se mor!

"I" would have put the 'nicht' at the end of the line. But then, you speak it, the language.
'na und ich? nich so guet. Aber mit Pfiff! Saw a really good poem last night on yiffstar. a clean translation of some classical stuff. Rhyme, meter, scantion, and meaning perfect. Kid wants to be a pro translator. Und ich, Ja, Nie!
I hit the wall with jener, what's jener? Jeder. Doch! Aber, ....
Anyway yours was ausgezeichnet!

Leben für Wen?

Weiss ich nicht was ich tun soll?

Sollte ich Menschen helfen?
Oder vielleicht mir selbst?
Mein Herz und meine Liebe
Oder für Hoffnung und Geld?

Ich?
oder andere...?

Warum können diese Dinge
Nicht zusammen funktionieren?