I've really enjoyed this series so far, even though you've suddenly taken such a serious turn with the plot, piling on the details and taking away the yiff. I certainly don't mind a good story - it's just a tad unexpected since the first two were based entirely around sex as the focus. :P

You do excellent work with your descriptive writing and word organization, and your grammar is near perfect. Very nice work.
(just start using 'than' instead of 'then' where appropriate :P)