Chapter 3 - The Mark Of Courage (Revised) by Averieth

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Chapter 3 - The Mark Of Courage (Revised)

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18 years ago

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well, not the best written stories i've seen. but i applaud you for the attempt. try using short forms instead of the long ones such as "They're" in the place of "They are" it makes the story seem cleaner. several grammar and spelling errors, but those are bound to occur in any story i suppose. overall, pretty good.

4/5 for the attempt

not bad i can see the potential but the grammar errors are clouding the 5/5.
ill give you a 4 and request you send futrure stories in this series to me for as much correction as i can, and ill send em back.
that fair enough.

P.S if you want ill try to correct the current stories of this series as well.

Cool Storyes =)
5/5
Keep wrighting ^_^

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