umm...wow. Where do I start.First of all not bad. secon thing, you are using the thing that causes it to echo too much. try to cut it a little in the middle.third, Your singing doesn't sound bad. it sounded pretty good.

i agree with starfox you actually have a better singing voice than me lol

Try upgrading your computer motherboard and getting upgraded RAM modules. If you have 536MB units, try getting a server motherboard and three or four 1GB RAM units. Also, don't forget to get a bigger fan to keep your computer nice and cool, and an appropriate power supply. Or just get a newer computer, and get your hard drive trasnposed over to the new system.

you bridge came too fast. Try this pattern A= phrase B=chorus C= bridge.

A,B,A,C,B,A your songe was sorta like A,C,B,AA,B <.< hear the diffrenc. Nice job althouh on that part, Something else sorta bothered me O.o are you playing F to a B or a G to A? >.> If you are that is called a Tritone and yeah it isn't good to have if your trying to "Sing" this one Tritones have a augmented 4th and diminished 5th ^^ try at all cost to avoid these notes..

Dude i love your songs!!! There amazing no matter what every1 else says

SING...SING MORE!!!! PLEASE?? lol sorry tired no sleep for a week -zonks out-