Into the night.
A short poem about a person who can't take it anymore...
12 years ago
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The rain pelts down As I make my way home. And the fog blocks my sight as I walk here alone. I'm told I can't go through with this but they can't see the light. The one thing I contemplate deep into the night. The lies and scars of my past will soon be free from me at last. So then I take a final step And see my life go flying past.
Something interesting I noticed was how you said that the lies and scars would be the ones to be freed from YOU, and not the other way around. Very deep.
I only have one tiny criticism, though (feel free to ignore it). The whole thing can be a bit difficult to read at first because you present it as a single paragraph instead of the more conventional lines and stanzas. If you break it up into lines, you would greatly improve the flow, in my opinion.
The actual content itself, however, is great. Don't change a thing. ^_^
When I wrote it I had done it in lines rather than a paragraph.
I was disappointed to see when it was published, it had formatted into that automatically.
I was disappointed.
but thank you for the very kind words.
that was my first gothic/dark poem! ^_^
That's how it works with my uploads.
Study is a real pull-back. -_-