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poetryveen's avatar

so beautiful, i love how you always include the original version, i bet it sounds so much better

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This really captures what it feels like to be stuck wanting something that just won’t line up. I like how the poem keeps circling loyalty, temptation, and self blame without forcing a conclusion. Lines like “everything is correct on paper” and “he does not feel my frequency” feel painfully honest. It reads less like a love poem and more like someone admitting a truth they’ve been avoiding, which makes it hit harder. Amazing work!

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