the prompt over at writers digest is to revisit or remix a previous poem. this is a great exercise. sometimes i’m inspired to begin again, explore a tangent, or tweak and change things. this was one where i had got stuck. it sat for quite a while. time allowed me to press on. here is the new version:
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There is a song within me
Deep, in hiding, in the dark places
A secret black fist clenching
a song of sobbing and wailing
choked to silence but not to
oblivion…
not just yet.
.
Across the sunny meadow
step across the tiny rivulette.
to and Into the mighty oak
Down into the womb
Back into the origin
The dungeon, the oubliette
A cage of iron, thought and will
There the demon is bottled up
thriving on my neglect
in the center a case of glass
and polished brass
within, ruby crystal treasure
there is also there
a shade among the shadows
a large lurking manshaped thing
It took me so long to even notice him
longer still to recognize
only now i’m sensing his longing
he’s made of little else
i haven’t caught a glimpse of him
since that night in that cave
i’ve been carrying him in a sack.
.
my throat is sore
mouth is burning
it hurts just to think of talking
so the truth that must sing
is another lurkingshadow.
waiting,,,
here is the original:
There is a song within me
Deep, in hiding, in the dark places
A secret black
Across the sunny meadow
Into the mighty oak
Down into the womb
Back into the origin
The dungeon, the oubliette
A cage of iron, thought and will
There the demon is bottled up
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